Wow, OK, I guess this is supposed to just be a atta-boy comments only site? No criticism allowed? OK, well here's my take on this piece.
Content- The opening scene, class suddenly quiet when teacher screams, ooooold, trite, over-used, not funny. NOT a good way to start. Now, what's with the lengthy, boring, and very not-funny dialogue about "I'm a correcti... more >
Wow, OK, I guess this is supposed to just be a atta-boy comments only site? No criticism allowed? OK, well here's my take on this piece.
Content- The opening scene, class suddenly quiet when teacher screams, ooooold, trite, over-used, not funny. NOT a good way to start. Now, what's with the lengthy, boring, and very not-funny dialogue about "I'm a corrections officer, not a cop"? I though this would lead SOMEWHERE given the time that's devoted to it, but no, it goes nowhere. So what on earth IS the point of Officer Jerry being a corrections officer?? How many corrections officers visit schools?? Silly and serves no apparent purpose. Obviously the writer had a reason for putting this end, so give the audience a clue please!!! Otherwise its wasted.
Also, the goofy voice, expression, and clothes? Purpose? Are we supposed to laugh at this? DO SOMETHING ORIGINAL
And why does the goofy voice and expression come and go, like in the flashback scene, gone completely.... It is the same character right? The flashback by the way looks like it was done spur of the moment where there was no set and no lighting.
Technically, OK, the most glaring problem is the back-lighting from the uncovered outside window in the background of many of the classroom shots.
OK, this is just my take here, and take that for what its worth, but if you're going to do a sketch where the subject is child molestation, you're starting at a disadvantage cause a lot of your audience is going to think its a pretty unfunny subject. Then, there's the plot, I mean where does this mess go? Is there a story that's being told? What is it? Conclusion? Moral? What? Beats me. I'm still waiting for someone, anyone, to point out even ONE scene in this video that he/she thinks is funny.
Q for DLS- At the request of a friend I have watched this, a couple of times now, and I'm still trying to figure out exactly which part is supposed to be funny?
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Wow, OK, I guess this is supposed to just be a atta-boy comments only site? No criticism allowed? OK, well here's my take on this piece.
Content-
The opening scene, class suddenly quiet when teacher screams, ooooold, trite, over-used, not funny. NOT a good way to start. Now, what's with the lengthy, boring, and very not-funny dialogue about "I'm a correcti... more >
This is great. Way to go Mike!
Q for DLS-
At the request of a friend I have watched this, a couple of times now, and I'm still trying to figure out exactly which part is supposed to be funny?