The eyes have it

OHH,YOU ARE AN ENGINEER,THAT EXPLAINS THE SIMPLE PLAINNESS OF YOUR WRITING,AND THE AWKWARD ATTEMPTS AT HUMOROUS REFERENCE. I ONCE READ A BOOK AS A CHILD WHOSE READING RHYTHM,AND OVER-AMBITIOUS HUMOR TONES WERE VERY SIMILAR.YOU MUST BE FINANCING THE PUBLISHING PERSONALLY.HOPEFULLY YOU HAVEN’T INVESTED TOO MUCH IN THE FIRST EDITION,BECAUSE YOU SHOULD REALLYREW... more >

OHH,YOU ARE AN ENGINEER,THAT EXPLAINS THE SIMPLE PLAINNESS OF YOUR WRITING,AND THE AWKWARD ATTEMPTS AT HUMOROUS REFERENCE. I ONCE READ A BOOK AS A CHILD WHOSE READING RHYTHM,AND OVER-AMBITIOUS HUMOR TONES WERE VERY SIMILAR.YOU MUST BE FINANCING THE PUBLISHING PERSONALLY.HOPEFULLY YOU HAVEN’T INVESTED TOO MUCH IN THE FIRST EDITION,BECAUSE YOU SHOULD REALLYREWRITE THE STORY WITH MORE INTENT ON THE FACTS AND ACTUAL STORY THAN THE STYLE IN WHICH YOU TELL IT.THE STORY ITSELF IS ALWAYS GOOD ENOUGH,BUT PERSPECTIVE AND PORTRAYAL CAN GET IN THE WAY.HOPE I DON’T DISSUADE,BUT INSPIRE YOUR EFFORTS.YOU HAVE OBVIOUSLY DONE WELL,TO HAVE GIVEN UP ENGINEERING FOR AN ELEMENTARY CLASSROOM TO GIVE BACK,AND THAT IS ADMIRABLE.