1st episode script

I wrote this script over the summer and im not a pro at writing but it’s the basis for our furst episode which we are about to film. Give me your thoughts on how it can be better.

Cosmic Comedy Episode 1: Welcome to Cosmic We open the episode with a Montague of a guy waking up, doing his daily routine as he wakes up. Staring at the wall and finally staring at his oatmeal bowl. He then hears a knock at the door but seems to still be in a trance. But breaks out of it as the knock becomes louder. The guy looks very upset as he has to get up to answer the door. Camera follows him as he walks to the door. Pauses before he opens. Cole: How the fucks are you? Justin stares Justin: How the hell did you get here? Cole: I walked. Decided to lose a few lbs before the school year started. Justin: Your mom dropped you off. Cole: Yeah. Justin: Thought so. Both sit at the doorway for several seconds, both seem in a daze. Justin: Alright well come in. Cole: Thought you’d never ask. Justin and Cole both walk to the table and sit down. Cole tries to look professional as he sits down and folds his hands together. Cole: I suppose you know why I’m here? Justin: Can’t say I do. Cole: Well as you may or may not know we are one week away from school and it’s been awhile since we hung out. Cole stands up and walks around the table Justin: Yeah I guess so I mean we haven’t done anything this summer anyways. Cole: What? Yes we have we’ve done plenty of shit. Justin: Like what? (FLASHBACK) Justin and Cole sitting in Justin’s room Justin: What do you wanna do? Cole: I don’t know. Dude let’s just chill for a while ya know. NEXT WEEK Justin: What do you wanna do? Cole stands up Cole: I got it I fuckin got it man. Justin stands up Justin: What is it tell me. Cole: I lost it. Justin: What do you mean? Cole: It means I fucking lost it man. I had the idea and I fucking lost it. God damnit why would you curse me. Cole picks up some scissors Cole: Ill fucking do it man. Justin: Woo. Woo. Don’t do it ! (FLASHBLACK) Cole: Yeah we haven’t done anything. Alright if we sit here we’ll think of something it’s just natural it’ll come. Justin: Yeah, it’ll come. 5 minutes later Cole: Got anything Justin: Nope Cole: Fuck it’s the same thing all over again Justin: We can call Brian Cole: Ok well see if he wants to do anything END SCENE Cole and Justin pull up to brains house. Cole is talking as they pull up to Brian house. Cole: I mean you just look a little uptight when was the last time you eh you know ah did that thing. Justin: What thing oh! What the fuck man why would you ask me that. Cole: I said you look a little uptight I was just asking. Justin: Listen I’m doing a bunch of shit and I don’t have the time plus I’m hanging out with you half the time. Cole: Time motherfucker time is not an option. Like I do it at least three times a day. Once in the morning ya know kinda charge the batteries. Another after lunch helps me break a sweat. And the last when I go to bed it the most natural form of Nyquil. Justin: You know it’ll make you blind. Cole: Well I’m half way there Cole and Justin walk into Brians house look around and can’t find him Cole: Yo! Brian where you at. Brian grunting from the bathroom Brian: I’m taking a shit, what the fuck do you want. Justin: We wanted to hang out. Fuck I don’t know we want something to do. Brian walk out of the bathroom Brian: Can’t. Cole: Can’t what the fuck, that’s your answer. Brian sits down on his bed Brian: I made that toilet my bitch. Brian lies down Brian: I must reflect. Justin: Ok. Well at least give us one reason why you can’t hang with us. Brian: I got the band. We’re supposed to do something. Justin: Yeah. Haws that going by the way? Brian: Oh. It’s good.Yeah. Real good. (FLASHBACK) Brian singing Band Member: Brian! Shut the fuck up! Brian: But what if I did this. Band Member: I’ll call you if I need you. Ya know what why don’t you just fucking leave. Brian: But this is my house. Band Member: I already talked to your mom and I actually live here now. So, uh if you could, start packing. Brian: What? Band Member: Just Joking. But get the fuck out. (FLASHBACK OVER) Justin: Sounds good. Brian: Oh it is. Cole: Sounds like bullshit. Brian: What the fuck do you know. Brian’s cell phone rings he looks at it. Cole: You gonna get that. Brian answers his phone and it sounds as if he is getting chewed out Brian: What do you want to do? END SCENE TWO HOURS LATER Justin and Brian are playing Guitar Hero. Justin: Ah.Ha fuck you. Brian: Jealously is a horrible thing Justin. Justin: I am so jealous. As I figuratively rape you with my score. Camera pans to Cole on the floor Brian: One more. Justin: If I must kick your ass. Cole: No! I thought we were going to do something. Justin: We are. Cole: No! I meant driving around or something. Justin: Just what let me beat Brian real quick. Cole: Alright fuck it. 5 Minutes Later Cole: Alright Justin you won. Justin: Where do you wanna go. Brian: Dude let’s get some fucking food. Cole: I’m down. All of them get in Brians car Brian starts to drive then his car begins to slow. Cole: What the fuck’s going on? Brian: I think I got a flat. Cole: Shit! Justin: We don’t know yet it may not be that bad. They all walk out of the car. Brian: Yeah it’s flat. Cole kneels down to the car. Cole: You fucking. You piece of shit. If you had a face I’d punch you. Goddamnit you know that you fuckin tire! Justin: Oh that was really fucking clever. Cole: You trying to be funny now. I’m fucking tired of you stupid bullshit. Justin: You’re tired of it. I’m tired of your bullshit always putting me down fuck you. And good luck getting yourself home. Brian: I’m gonna like go to a tire store do any of you wanna help me. Justin + Cole: No! Justin walks to his truck and Cole walks down the street. Brian flicks bot of them off as they walk away. Justin walking down the street as it starts to get darker outside. Justin: Stupid motherfucker. Who does he think he is talking like that fuck him. Justin continues to walk down the street. Justin: Maybe I overeacted a little bit. Shit now I gotta go find him. Justin hears a loud bang and runs to his car. Cole walking on the sidewalk goes over to the park. Cole looks around for a little bit. Cole: Dumbass. I’m not going back there. Fuck him. He’ll have to come find me if he wants to talk to me. Cole continues to walk in the park. Cole: I’m so fucking hungry. Cole walks over to a slide and see’s a baggy of what appears to be weed. Cole: Hmm. What the fuck. Cole eats a little bit of weed from the baggy. Justin is driving in his truck with the flashlight poking out of it. Justin: Where the fuck is he? Justin picks up the his cell phone. Justin calls Brian. Justin: Maybe he’s there. Brians phone rings but he’s unable to answer it as he is asleep on the toliet. Justin: Fuck. Cole is on top of somekind of playground equipment. Cole: What if I fucking jumped. Cole sees another Cole at the bottom of the playground. Cole 2: Fucking do it man. Just as cole is about to jump he recieves a call from justin. Cole Jumps as he recieves the call. Cole: What the fuck? Cole answers the phone. Justin: Hey where are you man. Cole: Who is this? Justin: It’s me. Cole: No! I’m me. Who are you. Justin: It’s Justin. Cole: Oh! Hey man im sorry for yelling at you. Cole begins to cry. Cole: You have always been a good friend. (Crying Loudly) Justin: Ok dude well were are you at? Cole: Im coming! Cole jumps down off of the playground. Cole 2: Pussy! Cole continues to run down the street till he gets to Justins. He sneaks in a very stealthy way but trips and falls in the house, opens Justin’s door. Justin is talking in slo-mo. Justin: Hey where have you been! Cole looks at him very strangley and lays down on the floor Justin: What the fuck? (slo-mo) END SCENE Cole wakes up in Justins room on the floor. Cole: Son of a Bitch! Cole walks into Justins living room and see’s Justin at the table. Justin: Hey. Cole: Hey whats going on. Justin: Nothing. Cole: Hey um what happened last night? Justin: Well you wiged out or something fuck I don’t know. You were acting wiered and you kinda passed out. Cole: Shit. I think I ate some weed. Justin: Shut the fuck up. Cole: Im dead serious you saw the way I was acting. Justin: True. I was thinking of calling brian see if we’ll do something you want me to. Cole: Sure. Justin picks up his phone and calls brian. Brian wakes up as he recieves the call. Brian answers. Brian: Hey. Justin: Whats up. Hey I got cole over here and we wanted to know if you wanted to hang out. Brian: Yeah sure. Um ill be over in a little bit. Justin: Alright see ya later. Brian: Later. Brian gets changed and looks out of his window and see’s one of his Bandmember. Brian: Fuck! Brian looks around franticly and grabs his blanket. He hears a knock at the door and he throws his blanket through the door and runs. Brian gets in his car and starts to drive down the street. Brian: Fuck yeah. Brian start to relax when a the band member pops out of the backseat Brian: What the fuck man! Band Member: Hey calm the fuck down man just be cool. Brian: Be cool you fucking hid in my car. Band Member: Pussy! Brian: Dude get the fuck out of my car. Band Member: Alright, Alright I’m going. But where the fuck are you going. Brian: I’m going to Jus- um Dan Johnson’s house. Band Member- Who the fuck is that. Brian: Um he’s some new guy around here. Band Member: We’ll his name sucks. Brian: Ya know what I don’t judge people ok. Band Member: There’s study I hear people with suckie names are suckie people just thought I’d pass that tidbit of information your way. Brian: Get out Band Member: Ok, Ok im gone. Band Member leaves and Brian drives away Camera moves to Justin and Cole sitting at Justins table Justin: You still gonna be in that class Cole: No! Justin: Why not. Cole: I don’t know the lady said I cursed to much or something. Justin: Really. Cole: Yeah stupid fucking bitch. Brian rushes into Justin’s House Justin: What took you so long . Brian: Nothing, Nothing at all. END SCENE Later That Night Justin: Alright I think I’m going to go to sleep. Cole: Yeah it’s about that time. Cole lays on the ground. Moves around for a little bit. Cole: Hey um dude do you mind turning off that computer screen. Justin: I kinda do. Cole: What? Justin: I don’t wanna turn it off. Cole: Why not? Justin: Ever since I was little. (Justin looks over and Brian’s asleep.) I’ve um had this problem. I’m afraid of dark things. Cole Laughs Justin: It’s not funny A Montague begins with Justin wanting ice cream but there’s only chocolate ice cream. Justin walking down the street see’s a black guy and turns the other way. Black Guy: Hey man can you help me. What the next street over. Justin looks at him and runs away Black Guy: Fuck white people. Back in the room Cole: Wow. Justin: Why do you think I keep a flashlight in my truck. Cole: You truly are a pussy. Justin: Shut up and go to sleep. END

this took me 15 minutes to read, well done

holy shit, brodeo.

re-format that, or just host a .doc/.txt copy of this text and i’ll check it out. no WAY am i reading all that shit.

sorry i don’t know how

CarlSpackler said:

holy shit, brodeo.

re-format that, or just host a .doc/.txt copy of this text and i’ll check it out. no WAY am i reading all that shit.

Ok . . . first off, i have to agree with my man Carl. If you reformatted that it would be a lot easier to both read and understand. Pick up a copy of Screenplay by Syd Field. It’ll tell you exactly how to format a screenplay. Next up: I liked the interacitons between the guys, very funny. But maybe you should string it all together into one crazy night that starts with them all being bored and builds up to the flat tire and the black guy. Otherwise it doesnt seem to be heading anywhere, just a bunch of random scenes. Also: what if Brian’s band wasn’t a real band but really four guys who play Rock Band all day and THINK they’re a band. You know they have to practice like a real band and stuff like that. i don’t know. Just trying to help.

Thanks.

Well if anybody was wonering (which probably isn’t anyone) we will begin filming the 1st episode on Sunday and Monday. And hopefully it will be posted by the end of next week after editing. No gaurantees. I will post a new topic when it is up. Thank You.

http://www.scriptfrenzy.org/eng/howtoformatascreenplay

You can learn about formatting here…

Thank You

SouthernJewishPrincess said:

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good luck and make sure you MESSAGE me when it’s up. I’d love to see it.

Cosmic Comedy said:

Well if anybody was wonering (which probably isn’t anyone) we will begin filming the 1st episode on Sunday and Monday. And hopefully it will be posted by the end of next week after editing. No gaurantees. I will post a new topic when it is up. Thank You.

I’ll read it if ya chuck me a link to a formatted version, theater of film version is fine.

Check out my films too please.

I’m goin’ with everyone else---re-format that sh*t…...try Celtx….it’s free…but it sounds good… Cosmic Comedy said:

I wrote this script over the summer and im not a pro at writing but it’s the basis for our furst episode which we are about to film. Give me your thoughts on how it can be better.